Today: We drafted our “Wild Encounters” composition.
We also looked briefly at some examples of Dillard’s sentence structures. Try imitating one or two of these structures in your own writing:
- “He was ten inches long, thin as a curve, a muscled ribbon, brown as fruitwood, soft-furred, alert.”
- “Our look as if two lovers, or deadly enemies, met unexpectedly on an overgrown path when each had been thinking of something else: a clearing blow to the gut.”
- “It felled the forest, moved the fields, and drained the pond; the world dismantled and tumbled into that black hole of eyes.”
- “I should have lunged for that streak of white under the weasel’s chin and held on, held on through mud and into the wild rose, held on for a dearer life.”
For example, describing the ocean I might analyze the first example like this: Description of size, simile, metaphor, simile about colour, short description, single word. And then write about the ocean:
- “The waves were three feet high, loud as a garbage truck, a churning machine, grey as dull steel, frothing angrily, incessant.”
Give this a try with one of the above sentences or any other sentence (in this essay or elsewhere) that you consider beautiful or effective.
Homework: Please finish your first draft this weekend. On Tuesday we will read our last adventure-themed personal narrative: “Thanksgiving in Mongolia”.